Thank you for visiting my blog page. Are you here to comment on my Storybook 'Journey through Camelot' or here to respond to a message I left you? Either way, comments are welcome. I am curious what you guys have to say.
Hi so I just read your introduction and I actually didn’t know Morgan Le Fe was King Arthur’s sister. I will admit that I only know vaguely the story of King Arthur. I will admit from what I know about the story, I kind of find most of the characters annoying based off the story. I would need to fully read the story before making that a solid claim. I am pretty excited to hear Morgan Le Fe’s story. Props to you on the topic you chose. I have always enjoyed stories which look at the “bad guy” and try to give the character a real back story. You’re also a really good storyteller so props to you on that. I enjoy the detail and the descriptive nature of your writing. It seems like you’ve put a lot of thought into it. I don’t actually know anything about the island of Avalon, it would be nice if you put the details about the significance of the island in the introduction. Other than that, it’s a fantastic story.
Hello! Wow your introduction really made me want to read more of your stories! I love the setup of Morgan Le Fe wanting to set the story straight. It made me think of the general style of villains actually being the good guys like in Maleficent or Wicked. I really enjoy those point of view changes. It really goes along with the real world theme that the winners write the history books so you never get the other side of the story. I would be interested to learn more about why these girls specifically were chosen to hear the stories. Are they prominent in Camelot? Or are they related to prominent figures? Or are they the town gossips and therefore would spread information quickly? So many options and I would love to see which story you choose for them. I would also love to know how they got the invitation from Morgan in the first place. Though, I am sure it has to do with magic. Overall I love your introduction. It seems to set up a great frametale and I look forward to reading the stories that you add to go along with it!
Hi Carmen! I chose to read your storybook introduction for my free choice this week. This is such a neat idea for your storybook and I love the direction you’ve decided to go with it! I was not familiar with Avalon or Morgan Le Fe before reading this, nor did I know of the connection to King Arthur. The diction in your introduction used to describe the setting of Avalon is impeccable. It really allowed me to visualize this scene in my head. Morgan Le Fe seems like a really cool and dynamic character the way she is painted as a villain but in fact seems like the victim in your introduction. I look forward to reading further into your storybook to see whether or not Morgan Le Fe is ever able to leave the island and also to hear stories of her childhood. Overall really great job, keep up the good work! I appreciate the uniqueness of your storybook idea.
Hi Carmen! I haven't read a storybook over Camelot, making your storybook the first. I'm actually pretty excited to learn about King Arthur and his sister. Honestly, I don't know much about King Arthur at all except for my faint memory of the Disney movie. Your introduction set the ominous mood perfectly. I felt chills as I was reading your story. The island of Avalon sounded so spooky yet thrilling, like a call to adventure. The way you described Morgan Le Fe was the exact image I had in my head. Even her name sounds exotic! The image you chose complimented the story very well with its dark tones and mystery. I wonder who the women were that showed up to the island. Did Morgan Le Fe randomly pick these women or are they part of a bigger plot that will be revealed later? You've done a great job in forming an introduction that told just the right amount of plot as well as grabbing the reader's attention! I can't wait to read more!
I loved your introduction Carmen! It is a great set up to the rest of your storybook! I have to admit that I don’t know much about King Arthur and his stories. As an outsider who is unfamiliar with these stories I still found your introduction to be very fascinating and easy to follow. Anyone would enjoy reading it. I like how you set up what the rest of your book was going to be about. I’m guessing that the island name and the names in your story are based on the original story, but I though they were really cool! These little details really added to the introduction. I like the visuals you used when talking about the fog and this exotic island. I hope that I get to read some more of your stories, I am interested to hear more about what goes on, on this island that night when the thirteen women are there.
Wow, Carmen! Having read both your introduction and your first story, I'm excited to read more. It's so cool that you chose Avalon and the Arthurian legends as the theme for your story; I'm actually in the Medieval Fair Cast at OU, and the city that Medieval Fair sets up for all of the guests that come every year is actually called Avalon! And I totally agree with what you said about the history books: they only ever portray the side of the story of the one that wrote them down, which often times is the person with the most power, and that way a lot of other stories can get silenced. But anyway, I really liked the detail in your writing--all of the descriptive prose about the island and the specific things that Morgana had to do during her apprenticeship with Merlin really added to the story and made it seem more real. I wonder, though, that Morgana told all of those women that she would never trust again? It seems to me that she's actually trusting them quite a bit, by telling them her story! I can't wait to hear more about her and Merlin, and to see who ends up in this story.
Carmen, When looking at your blog, the simplicity caught my eye. The color white has always seemed "pure" or "simple" to me and it makes for a nice blog. Not only the color caught my eye, but also the side panels (widgets) and their looks also. I especially like how the "about me" includes a small picture of you, I may modify my blogs widgets at least (if possible) to look something more like yours.
Hi Carmen! When I was looking through blogs for things that I liked, yours caught my attention! What mainly caught my attention were your quotes in the sidebar. I think that is a fantastic idea and I may need to implement it myself! Your blog also just looks nice and clean which I appreciate. Well done!
Hey Carmen! I like that you put a picture of yourself and a small About Me section on your blog. I think it's nice to put a face to all the stories that I read on this blog.
Hello! I was a little surprised by your song. It was entitled lullaby so I expected something a bit more upbeat and kid-like. Some of the lyrics seemed a bit dark to me. I may have missed the point though. The music also seemed a bit foreign sounding, maybe African? It was very melodic and easy to listen to!
OH MY GOSH! You listen to Heather Dale too???! How awesome! I really like this song--I like the irony in the word "lullaby", because this is really probably what Mordred heard when Morgana le Fay sang him to sleep, vengeful as she was. My favorite song by Heather Dale, though, is the Faerie Queene (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vbEwUTjKwLU) partly because of the awesome fiddle and partly because I've always really liked this particular folk tale!
I really enjoyed your story and introduction! Your introduction gave a lot of background and insight into what your story was going to be about, which was really helpful, especially for someone who isn't very familiar with Arthurian tales. You also made it very mysterious, and gave off the impression that she would be in a lot of trouble if her brother ever found out that she was holding secret meetings. I like the fact that you tried not to change too much of the original story, but rather just put your own twist on it. I didn't know that King Arthur had a sister, or one who studied under Merlin. I think it's really interesting that she had to leave her mother so soon after her father died, then learned so much from him, only to be betrayed by him so shortly after. I'm really excited to read your other stories in your storybook!
Hey Morgan! Wow I am in love with the topic of your Storybook! I have watched Merlin (on SciFy) and read Le Morte d’Arthur. If you have not seen the show or read the book, I would highly recommend them. Avalon is something that not everyone knows about so I think that is a great way to capture your audience’s attention right off the bat. I also think you have a cool take on the stories and how you are presenting them. Morgan Le Fe is an incredible character so following her side of things will be super cool. I also like your take on her upbringing with Merlin. If you enjoy learning about Merlin I would check out the book series entitled The Lost Years of Merlin, a great young adult series about the Arthurian legends focusing on Merlin. This first story did a great job of showing Morgan’s come to power and Arthur’s origin story. It also makes you sympathize with Morgan! Great job!
Hi! I read your storybook post called Excalibur this week for my comments (admittedly that are a little late seeing as they were due yesterday). I really enjoyed reading your story! I have not read many of the Camelot type units, so it was a new experience for me. I also really liked that you decided to change the perspective of the story. The call to action at the end to help her connect with her brother was also really cool. Was that part of the original story or did you decide to include that yourself? I'm also curious if you will be writing a follow-up story. I want to find out whether they ever reconnect!
Hello Carmen, I absolutely loved the story about Excalibur. I watched an Anime once (I know not very professional) but I fell in love with King Arthur's character and his amazing sword. Honestly, you writing was captivating and it made me follow through each and every word in the line, excellent job with the writing and all the expressions used. The part were magic was used was highly interesting, such things attract my attention. The part about the sheath was also interesting, it was pretty cool to notice the change you did with the magic in the sheath not the sword. The sheath is indeed an important element in the fabric of the story, however, I am still curious to why it was not possible to trace the magic on the sheath. The call to connect with the brother was great, it always goes back to the fundamentals of human relationships were people would ask for forgiveness for their mistakes or would just not care. Unfortunately, in our lives people seem to hurt and not care anymore, humans are selfish by nature. But, I guess "C'est La Vie" no? I would be interested in reading more about this story if you follow up anytime. Great writing, keep up the superb work!
I am from the Indian Epics class and I decided to look through the Mythology and Folklore class projects. As soon as I saw the title of your storybook, I knew I had to read it. I have always been a huge fan of the stories of King Arthur and the Knights of the Round Table! I love how you decided to focus on Morgan Le Fe. I have always loved reading something from another character's perspective. Sometimes it changes the entire story. I read your story "Merlin's Apprentice". It was interesting to read Morgan Le Fe's childhood memories. It really gives a lot of insight to her character. I did notice that you said "chose" at one point instead of "choose". However, I absolutely loved your story. You had a great tone and really captivated your readers with your story's details. Great job Carmen! Good luck with your finals!
Hi so I just read your introduction and I actually didn’t know Morgan Le Fe was King Arthur’s sister. I will admit that I only know vaguely the story of King Arthur. I will admit from what I know about the story, I kind of find most of the characters annoying based off the story. I would need to fully read the story before making that a solid claim. I am pretty excited to hear Morgan Le Fe’s story. Props to you on the topic you chose. I have always enjoyed stories which look at the “bad guy” and try to give the character a real back story. You’re also a really good storyteller so props to you on that. I enjoy the detail and the descriptive nature of your writing. It seems like you’ve put a lot of thought into it. I don’t actually know anything about the island of Avalon, it would be nice if you put the details about the significance of the island in the introduction. Other than that, it’s a fantastic story.
ReplyDeleteHello! Wow your introduction really made me want to read more of your stories! I love the setup of Morgan Le Fe wanting to set the story straight. It made me think of the general style of villains actually being the good guys like in Maleficent or Wicked. I really enjoy those point of view changes. It really goes along with the real world theme that the winners write the history books so you never get the other side of the story.
ReplyDeleteI would be interested to learn more about why these girls specifically were chosen to hear the stories. Are they prominent in Camelot? Or are they related to prominent figures? Or are they the town gossips and therefore would spread information quickly? So many options and I would love to see which story you choose for them. I would also love to know how they got the invitation from Morgan in the first place. Though, I am sure it has to do with magic.
Overall I love your introduction. It seems to set up a great frametale and I look forward to reading the stories that you add to go along with it!
Hi Carmen! I chose to read your storybook introduction for my free choice this week.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a neat idea for your storybook and I love the direction you’ve decided to go with it! I was not familiar with Avalon or Morgan Le Fe before reading this, nor did I know of the connection to King Arthur.
The diction in your introduction used to describe the setting of Avalon is impeccable. It really allowed me to visualize this scene in my head.
Morgan Le Fe seems like a really cool and dynamic character the way she is painted as a villain but in fact seems like the victim in your introduction. I look forward to reading further into your storybook to see whether or not Morgan Le Fe is ever able to leave the island and also to hear stories of her childhood.
Overall really great job, keep up the good work! I appreciate the uniqueness of your storybook idea.
Hi Carmen! I haven't read a storybook over Camelot, making your storybook the first. I'm actually pretty excited to learn about King Arthur and his sister. Honestly, I don't know much about King Arthur at all except for my faint memory of the Disney movie. Your introduction set the ominous mood perfectly. I felt chills as I was reading your story. The island of Avalon sounded so spooky yet thrilling, like a call to adventure. The way you described Morgan Le Fe was the exact image I had in my head. Even her name sounds exotic! The image you chose complimented the story very well with its dark tones and mystery. I wonder who the women were that showed up to the island. Did Morgan Le Fe randomly pick these women or are they part of a bigger plot that will be revealed later? You've done a great job in forming an introduction that told just the right amount of plot as well as grabbing the reader's attention! I can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteI loved your introduction Carmen! It is a great set up to the rest of your storybook! I have to admit that I don’t know much about King Arthur and his stories. As an outsider who is unfamiliar with these stories I still found your introduction to be very fascinating and easy to follow. Anyone would enjoy reading it. I like how you set up what the rest of your book was going to be about. I’m guessing that the island name and the names in your story are based on the original story, but I though they were really cool! These little details really added to the introduction. I like the visuals you used when talking about the fog and this exotic island. I hope that I get to read some more of your stories, I am interested to hear more about what goes on, on this island that night when the thirteen women are there.
ReplyDeleteWow, Carmen! Having read both your introduction and your first story, I'm excited to read more. It's so cool that you chose Avalon and the Arthurian legends as the theme for your story; I'm actually in the Medieval Fair Cast at OU, and the city that Medieval Fair sets up for all of the guests that come every year is actually called Avalon! And I totally agree with what you said about the history books: they only ever portray the side of the story of the one that wrote them down, which often times is the person with the most power, and that way a lot of other stories can get silenced. But anyway, I really liked the detail in your writing--all of the descriptive prose about the island and the specific things that Morgana had to do during her apprenticeship with Merlin really added to the story and made it seem more real. I wonder, though, that Morgana told all of those women that she would never trust again? It seems to me that she's actually trusting them quite a bit, by telling them her story! I can't wait to hear more about her and Merlin, and to see who ends up in this story.
ReplyDeleteCarmen,
ReplyDeleteWhen looking at your blog, the simplicity caught my eye. The color white has always seemed "pure" or "simple" to me and it makes for a nice blog. Not only the color caught my eye, but also the side panels (widgets) and their looks also. I especially like how the "about me" includes a small picture of you, I may modify my blogs widgets at least (if possible) to look something more like yours.
Hi Carmen! When I was looking through blogs for things that I liked, yours caught my attention! What mainly caught my attention were your quotes in the sidebar. I think that is a fantastic idea and I may need to implement it myself! Your blog also just looks nice and clean which I appreciate. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHey Carmen! I like that you put a picture of yourself and a small About Me section on your blog. I think it's nice to put a face to all the stories that I read on this blog.
ReplyDeleteHello! I was a little surprised by your song. It was entitled lullaby so I expected something a bit more upbeat and kid-like. Some of the lyrics seemed a bit dark to me. I may have missed the point though. The music also seemed a bit foreign sounding, maybe African? It was very melodic and easy to listen to!
ReplyDeleteOH MY GOSH! You listen to Heather Dale too???! How awesome! I really like this song--I like the irony in the word "lullaby", because this is really probably what Mordred heard when Morgana le Fay sang him to sleep, vengeful as she was. My favorite song by Heather Dale, though, is the Faerie Queene (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vbEwUTjKwLU) partly because of the awesome fiddle and partly because I've always really liked this particular folk tale!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story and introduction! Your introduction gave a lot of background and insight into what your story was going to be about, which was really helpful, especially for someone who isn't very familiar with Arthurian tales. You also made it very mysterious, and gave off the impression that she would be in a lot of trouble if her brother ever found out that she was holding secret meetings. I like the fact that you tried not to change too much of the original story, but rather just put your own twist on it. I didn't know that King Arthur had a sister, or one who studied under Merlin. I think it's really interesting that she had to leave her mother so soon after her father died, then learned so much from him, only to be betrayed by him so shortly after. I'm really excited to read your other stories in your storybook!
ReplyDeleteHey Morgan! Wow I am in love with the topic of your Storybook! I have watched Merlin (on SciFy) and read Le Morte d’Arthur. If you have not seen the show or read the book, I would highly recommend them. Avalon is something that not everyone knows about so I think that is a great way to capture your audience’s attention right off the bat. I also think you have a cool take on the stories and how you are presenting them. Morgan Le Fe is an incredible character so following her side of things will be super cool. I also like your take on her upbringing with Merlin. If you enjoy learning about Merlin I would check out the book series entitled The Lost Years of Merlin, a great young adult series about the Arthurian legends focusing on Merlin. This first story did a great job of showing Morgan’s come to power and Arthur’s origin story. It also makes you sympathize with Morgan! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi! I read your storybook post called Excalibur this week for my comments (admittedly that are a little late seeing as they were due yesterday). I really enjoyed reading your story! I have not read many of the Camelot type units, so it was a new experience for me. I also really liked that you decided to change the perspective of the story. The call to action at the end to help her connect with her brother was also really cool. Was that part of the original story or did you decide to include that yourself? I'm also curious if you will be writing a follow-up story. I want to find out whether they ever reconnect!
ReplyDeleteHello Carmen,
ReplyDeleteI absolutely loved the story about Excalibur. I watched an Anime once (I know not very professional) but I fell in love with King Arthur's character and his amazing sword. Honestly, you writing was captivating and it made me follow through each and every word in the line, excellent job with the writing and all the expressions used. The part were magic was used was highly interesting, such things attract my attention. The part about the sheath was also interesting, it was pretty cool to notice the change you did with the magic in the sheath not the sword. The sheath is indeed an important element in the fabric of the story, however, I am still curious to why it was not possible to trace the magic on the sheath. The call to connect with the brother was great, it always goes back to the fundamentals of human relationships were people would ask for forgiveness for their mistakes or would just not care. Unfortunately, in our lives people seem to hurt and not care anymore, humans are selfish by nature. But, I guess "C'est La Vie" no?
I would be interested in reading more about this story if you follow up anytime. Great writing, keep up the superb work!
Carmen,
ReplyDeleteI am from the Indian Epics class and I decided to look through the Mythology and Folklore class projects. As soon as I saw the title of your storybook, I knew I had to read it. I have always been a huge fan of the stories of King Arthur and the Knights of the Round Table! I love how you decided to focus on Morgan Le Fe. I have always loved reading something from another character's perspective. Sometimes it changes the entire story. I read your story "Merlin's Apprentice". It was interesting to read Morgan Le Fe's childhood memories. It really gives a lot of insight to her character. I did notice that you said "chose" at one point instead of "choose". However, I absolutely loved your story. You had a great tone and really captivated your readers with your story's details. Great job Carmen! Good luck with your finals!